The goal of this exercise is to help you learn how to apply Chapter 2's reader-centered advice for creating effective résumés.
The Exercise
In this exercise, you will examine two drafts of the résumé prepared by Roberta Fitzgerald.
First, read her initial draft (Résumé #1), which is at the bottom of this page. Referring to the information presented in Chapter 2, create a list of improvements she might make.
Second, compare your list of revisions to the revisions that Roberta made in order to create her second draft (Résumé #2). What changes did you recommend that she didn't make. What changes did she make that you didn't consider? Could the second draft be improved? If so, how?
While working on this exercise, you may download the Revision Checklist for Résumés.
Roberta P. Fitzgerald
| Current Address: 224 Francis Hall, HJ-16 University of Washington Seattle, WA 98105 (206) 547-7852 |
Permanent Address: 174 Oak Lane Bremerton, WA 98370 (206) 373-0342 |
PERSONAL DATA
Birthdate 8/6/68, Marital Status-single, Height, 5'6", Weight 115 lbs.,
Health-excellent, Physical limitations-none, Social Security 467-87-4413
OBJECTIVE:
Seeking a long term position as a team member of a dynamic engineering
organization utilizing my skills in group management, communication,
and productivity.
WORK EXPERIENCE:
Nordstrom, Seattle, Wa. Assistant to fitters and salespersons in Women's
Suits. Responsible for garments after fittings. Experience in working
in groups, customer relations, and tips on dressing well. Worked during
store sales. Sept. 2001 to present. Olympic Enterprises, Inc., Silverdale,
Wa. Addressed envelopes in calligraphy, assistant newsletter editor,
and a company rep. at their first open house. March 1999-Jun 2001. Skate
King, Inc., Bremerton Wa. Responsibilities included food preparation,
cashiering, repairing rollerskates, training snack bar workers, and
good communication skills to keep a happy atmosphere. January 1997-June
1998
EDUCATION:
University of Washington, Seattle, Wa.—B.S. in Mechanical Engineering,
March, 2004 G. P. A. 2.9/4.0 Olympic College, Bremerton, WA.—Associate
Pre-Professional Degree in Engineering, June, 2001 G. P. A. 3.0/4.0
ACTIVITIES AND HONORS
Society of Mechanical Engineers member, 2002-pres. Residence Hall Council
Steering Committee Chairperson Residence Hall Activities Advisor A.
S. B. Treasurer Runner up for Chamber of Commerce Award Avid golfer
REFERENCES:
| Dr. A. M. Mills
Prof. Mech. Engr. U. of W. (206) 543-8769 |
Ann Hartley
Mgr. Women's Suits, Seattle Nordstrom (206) 455-6391 ext.341 |
Roberta P. Fitzgerald
| Current Address: 224 Francis Hall, HJ-16 University of Washington Seattle, WA 98105 (206) 547-7852 |
Permanent Address: 174 Oak Lane Bremerton, WA 98370 (206) 373-0342 |
| Objective | To utilize my skills in group management, communication, and productivity as a team member of a dynamic engineering organization. |
| Education | B.S. in Mechanical Engineering University of Washington, Seattle, WA March 2004 Associate Pre-Professional Degree in Engineering Olympic College, Bremerton, WA June 2001 |
| Experience |
Sales assistant: Nordstroms, Seattle, WA Sep 01-present Assisted fitters and salespersons in the men's-suits department. Maintained inventory of garments after fittings. Gained experience working in groups and performing under pressure during store sales. Learned techniques of effective customer relations. Received professional advice on dressing well. Office clerk: Olympic Supply, Inc., Silverdale, WA Mar 99-Jun 01 Addressed envelopes in calligraphy. Assisted editing newsletter. Acted as company representative at their first open house. Cook/Assistant Manager: Skate King, Inc., Bremerton WA Jan 97-Jun 98 Prepared snack-bar items—burgers, fries, shakes, sandwiches. Cashiered. Repaired roller-skates. Trained snack-bar workers. Developed communication skills to keep a cheerful atmosphere. |
| Activities |
Society of Mechanical Engineers, member since 2002. Elected residence Hall Council Steering Committee Chairperson. Elected residence Hall Activities Advisor. ASB Treasurer—presented high school student budget to school board. Runner up for Chamber of Commerce Award—"Girl of the Year" |
| References | Personal and professional references available upon request |